Year 5 Literacy Homework

This week we have been looking at how to put suspense into our writing by using short sentences, ellipsis, similes and metaphors to describe what happens next. Using the picture in your homework book, we would like you to create a paragraph that creates suspense. Don’t forget to use what we have learnt!

 

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  1. BANG!!! I woke up with such a fright! It was pitch black, I couldn’t see anything infront of me as I walked out of my room. My heart was racing but I had to carry on and see where the noise had come from! Slowly I walked towards the stairs, I could hear all sorts of noises but I had to keep going. I reached downstairs and I screamed as straight infront of me was…….

  2. If it wasn’t for the loud wind howling ,as much as a werewolf in contact with the full moon, there would have been an empty silence. I suspected this strong North wind was guilty of shattering the glass pain to where it lay in millions of glass crystals under my feet. You really could understand why it had been abandoned so many years before. The white walls towered above me creating a wooly kind of texture that stretched way further than the many kind looking bungalows back in the south. Carefully built, a thatched roof cut the usual point at the top of the little full houses I had seen in my hike here. Long ago the door had been smashed down but as I got closer I knew that the wind wasn’t my only victim. Their not here, their not here, I reassured myself out loud. But they weren’t a secret for long. There was a loud creak. I halted, my blood flowing swiftly. Who? Why? When? I hadn’t the faintest idea. Suddenly, a winding figure appeared in the door way…

  3. I shuddered. The hair on my neck stood up. Then I heard a creak and saw a flash. It must of been me hallucinating. But no, at the door was a tall,white creature staring directly at me. I flicked my flashlight on. Nervously, I turned to see the same mysterious figure beckoning me. My feet were stuck to the spot. I dropped my light. I blinked and it was gone…

    I picked up my light and ventured on. It seemed quite peaceful. Until then a scary screaming noise coming from the basement and after a few second. Dead silence..

    As quite as a mouse, I tiptoe on.I saw a window. I needed some air. I looked out the window. Under the darkening sky was the same figure. what am I going to do ?

  4. As soon as I entered the village I saw the mansion standing alone among the tall weeds of a unkept lawn. I wondered what could have happened. When Dad said this was our house I couldn’t believe him. The stormy weather freaked us out a bit too, the day was dull, it was a black blanket. It was as dark as a bear sleeping in his cave. The old place was empty and windows were smashed giving it a gloomy atmosphere. The air grew thicker and lightning crackled around us…

    Marcus M.

  5. As Emily wondered away from home she came across an old shattered building as she got closer she heard an eerie sound she peered around the door and something grabbed her…

  6. SQUEEK went the door as Jess entered the old house. As her Mum and Dad unpacked, Jess was exploring the house like a detective. She found the cellar. As Jess slowly went down the stairs, CREAK, CREAK, cobwebs were dangling down trying to catch her. Then Jess saw a shiny thing hiding in the corner, whispering to her. Jess had found a dusty old mirror with cobwebs hanging off it. Jess looked into the mirror and saw a girl. She saw the girl move into the house years ago. Jess watched the girl find the mirror in the spooky scary attic. Jess saw the girl looking at the mirror. The girl SCREAMED, running away as fast as a bullet. Jess looked in the mirror and saw…she ran up the stairs SCREAMING…

    • I like the idea of putting suspense at the paragraph though maybe try and start your sentences in different ways next time. Like adverbs or similes or metaphors even.

  7. Interestingly, the haunted house waits for many mysteries…
    One gloomy, misty day Toby darted his way into the spooky house as quiet as a fox to investigate. As he opened the front door the loud creak disturbed the eerie silence. He stealthily crept into the dining room and his face went as white as a ghost when he saw what stood before him…..

  8. As I approached the haunted house I could see doors and windows were smashed. Every day I went there and every day it got scarier and scarier. The first time I went it was fine a lovely family lived there. Suddenly when I was walking up the hill one day a noise came from the house. The family went and left the house as quick as a lightning bolt. Since then the area was very deserted and mist rested there and the tree creaked beside the house and made it feel worse.

  9. THUD,THUD, SHATTER. The three noises before my fatal sleep. Sheets are over my head as quick as lightning! Suddenly everything went quite… Tap Tap Tap. Shivering like a bare hound in 6-feet of snow I lay. Darkness fell. I froze… I feel traumatized as I imagine the horrors that l hope are just in my head. Will I survive or will I not!

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